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Studying History

139 words
Submitted: Jun 14, 2026, 04:15 PM

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Estimated TOEFL · Writing

25/ 30
Advanced
0152230
Rubric4.0/5

Key Takeaway

The response effectively argues for the importance of studying history with relevant examples and a clear structure.

Depth of ElaborationModerate

Policymakers who understood the earlier crisis responded more effectively, thereby preventing complete economic collapse.

Fix·Expand on how policymakers used historical knowledge to make specific decisions, providing more detailed examples of actions taken.

Grammatical ConsistencyMinor

behaviour

Fix·Use 'behavior' to align with American English conventions, which is expected in TOEFL responses.

Clear Position

I firmly believe that studying history remains essential for sound decision-making.

This statement clearly establishes the student's stance, which is crucial for a coherent argument and aligns with TOEFL scoring criteria for clarity and purpose.

Relevant Example

This is clearly illustrated by the 2008 financial crisis, which bore striking similarities to the 1929 Great Depression.

Using specific historical events as examples strengthens the argument by providing concrete evidence, which is essential for high-scoring responses.

Balanced Perspective

That said, I agree with Student 2 that history should not be applied rigidly, as each era presents unique circumstances requiring fresh analysis.

Acknowledging counterarguments demonstrates critical thinking and a nuanced understanding, which are valued in TOEFL assessments.

Vocabulary & Flow

Linking Wordsgood
althoughrightlyfurthermorewhilein conclusion

Continue using a variety of linking words to enhance coherence and flow.

Repetitive Words
history4x
past eventshistorical studyhistorical context

Grammar Corrections

1 items found
behaviourbehavior

American English spelling

Suggested Academic Phrases

historical precedentcontextual analysis

Improvement Roadmap

High Impact

Deepen the analysis of examples.

Now: Policymakers who understood the earlier crisis responded more effectively, thereby preventing complete economic collapse.

Try: Detail the specific measures taken by policymakers during the 2008 crisis that were informed by historical knowledge.

Enhancing the depth of analysis can elevate the response to a higher score.
Quick Wins

Use American English spelling.

Where: body

Try: Change 'behaviour' to 'behavior'.

Polish

Vary word choice to avoid repetition.

Try: Use 'historical context' instead of repeating 'history'.