Academic Discussion
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The response addresses the topic of animal testing and presents a clear opinion, but it lacks specific examples and has several grammatical errors.
Grammatical errors affecting clarityCritical
“It minizes the adverse effects on humans and save thousands of life.”
Fix·It minimizes the adverse effects on humans and saves thousands of lives.
Lack of specific examplesModerate
“For example, if a medicine deminstrates its trategenic effects on animals then it should not be used on human.”
Fix·Provide a specific example of a drug that was tested on animals and its effects, such as Thalidomide, to strengthen the argument.
“Student 2 also raised a valid point that animals possess different system than human thats why animal testing would not portay true picture.”
This shows the student's ability to consider opposing viewpoints, which is important for a balanced argument.
“Animal testing contributes to new drug invention.”
The student clearly states their position, providing a foundation for the argument that follows.
“It minizes the adverse effects on humans and save thousands of life.”
The student connects animal testing to its potential benefits for human health, directly addressing the prompt.
Vocabulary & Flow
Incorporate more linking words like 'therefore', 'moreover', and 'consequently' to improve the flow of ideas.
Grammar Corrections
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Improvement Roadmap
Provide specific examples to support arguments.
Now: For example, if a medicine deminstrates its trategenic effects on animals then it should not be used on human.
Try: For example, the drug Thalidomide was tested on animals and showed teratogenic effects, leading to its restriction in human use.
Specific examples can significantly enhance the persuasiveness of the argument.Correct spelling errors to improve clarity.
Where: body
Try: demonstrates its teratogenic effects
Use more varied vocabulary to avoid repetition.
Try: Instead of 'testing', use 'experimentation' or 'evaluation'.