Write an Email
·You applied for a merit-based scholarship three weeks ago. The committee was supposed to announce decisions last week, but you have not received any notification. You want to inquire about your application status.
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Estimated TOEFL · Writing
Key Takeaway
The email effectively communicates the main points but suffers from grammatical errors and awkward phrasing.
Grammar and clarityCritical
“I do not recived any notification.”
Fix·I have not received any notification.
Awkward phrasingModerate
“I want to express my deep intention to be continue with the application.”
Fix·I want to express my strong desire to continue with the application process.
“This is something extremely important to me, because it can define my future.”
This effectively conveys the applicant's strong motivation and personal connection to the scholarship, which can positively influence the committee's perception.
“Thank you for your time and attention”
Expressing gratitude is a social convention that leaves a positive impression and shows respect for the reader's time.
“I am writing to because I applied for a merit-based scholarship three weeks ago, but I do not recived any notification.”
The email clearly states the purpose of the inquiry, which helps the recipient quickly understand the context and reason for the communication.
Vocabulary & Flow
Consider using additional linking words to enhance the flow and coherence of the email.
Grammar Corrections
1 items foundSpelling and punctuation correction
Email Structure
The greeting is polite but could be more specific by addressing the committee directly, if possible.
“Dear committee, I am writing to because I applied for a merit”
The opening paragraph effectively sets the context for the inquiry.
The body addresses most requirements but could more explicitly inquire about the decision timeline.
The closing is polite and expresses gratitude, but could be strengthened with a more explicit call to action.
The sign-off is appropriate and professional.
“Best regards”
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Improvement Roadmap
Use precise language to enhance clarity.
Now: I do not recived any notification.
Try: I have not received any notification regarding my application status.
Improves clarity and professionalism, which can positively impact the score.Correct spelling errors to enhance professionalism.
Where: opening
Try: received
Use more varied vocabulary to avoid repetition.
Try: Instead of repeating 'application', use 'submission' or 'candidacy'.