Write an Email
·You purchased a textbook from the campus bookstore, but your professor changed the required book on the first day of class. The bookstore has a 7-day return policy, and you are on day 6.
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Key Takeaway
The email effectively communicates the need to return the textbook and provides purchase details.
Grammatical errorModerate
“the details of my purchase is attached below,”
Fix·The details of my purchase are attached below,
Lack of specificity in return policy inquiryModerate
“I would ask you to brief me about your returning policy as according to the recipient its last day.”
Fix·Could you please provide details on the return process and refund timeline, as today is the last day according to your policy?
“Unfortunately, I have to return it because our professor wants us to study from his published book.”
This sentence clearly communicates the reason for returning the textbook, which is essential for addressing the task requirements.
“Oxford history book vol 5 Bought on 1st May”
Including specific purchase details helps the manager verify the transaction and facilitates the return process.
“Thank you in anticipation.”
Expressing gratitude in advance sets a positive tone and shows respect, which is important in formal communication.
Vocabulary & Flow
Grammar Corrections
1 items foundSubject-verb agreement requires 'are' for plural 'details'.
Email Structure
The greeting is appropriate but could be more formal with a specific name if known.
“Hello Manager, I am writing to tell you about the book history book I recently bought from your store six days ago. Unfortunately, I have to return it because our professor wants us to study from his published book. the details of my purchase is attached below, Oxford history book vol 5 Bought on 1st May I would ask you to brief me about your returning policy as according to the recipient its last day. Thank you in anticipation.”
The opening paragraph effectively introduces the purpose of the email.
The body addresses most requirements but lacks detailed inquiry about the return process.
The closing paragraph is polite and includes a call to action.
Your email is missing a proper sign-off. End with "Sincerely," "Best regards," or "Thank you," followed by your name.
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Improvement Roadmap
Enhance specificity in inquiries
Now: I would ask you to brief me about your returning policy as according to the recipient its last day.
Try: Could you please provide details on the return process and refund timeline, as today is the last day according to your policy?
Improving specificity can significantly enhance clarity and task fulfillment.Correct subject-verb agreement
Where: body
Try: The details of my purchase are attached below,
Use more formal language
Try: I am writing to request information about the return process and refund timeline.