Write an Email
·You accidentally spilled coffee on a library book while studying at a cafe. The book has some water damage but is still readable. You want to report the damage honestly and ask about next steps.
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Email Writing Guide
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TOEFL Writing Templates
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Common Grammar Mistakes
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Estimated TOEFL · Writing
Key Takeaway
The email effectively communicates the situation and requests guidance on next steps, demonstrating an understanding of the task.
Grammatical errors affecting clarityCritical
“During the break in the library while having my luch”
Fix·During a break in the library while having my lunch
Lack of detailed damage descriptionModerate
“I noticed that first two pages of the book were wet”
Fix·I noticed that the first two pages of the book were wet and slightly wrinkled
“I spilled coffee on the course book.”
This demonstrates responsibility and transparency, which are valued in academic and professional settings.
“I would like to know if I can pay for the damages incurred by any means or do I need to provide a replacement?”
This shows initiative in resolving the issue and a willingness to take responsibility, which is important for TOEFL scoring.
“I would be obliged by your response.”
The polite tone enhances the overall professionalism of the email, which is crucial for maintaining a formal tone.
Vocabulary & Flow
Include more varied transitional phrases to enhance coherence, such as 'therefore' or 'as a result'.
Grammar Corrections
1 items foundUse of 'would like' is more appropriate for expressing a desire in this context.
Email Structure
The greeting is formal and appropriate for the context.
“Dear Sir”
The opening paragraph clearly states the incident, providing necessary context.
All requirements are addressed, but more detail could improve clarity.
The closing paragraph effectively requests a response and expresses gratitude.
The sign-off is appropriate and maintains a formal tone.
“Regards”
Suggested Academic Phrases
Improvement Roadmap
Provide more detailed descriptions of the damage to enhance clarity.
Now: I noticed that first two pages of the book were wet
Try: I noticed that the first two pages of the book were wet and slightly wrinkled, but the text remains readable.
Improves content clarity and completeness.Correct minor grammatical errors to improve readability.
Where: body
Try: During a break in the library while having my lunch
Use more varied transitional phrases to improve flow.
Try: Therefore, I would like to know if I can pay for the damages.