Write an Email
·You recently completed an online course offered by your university. While the content was valuable, you experienced several technical difficulties with the learning platform. You want to provide feedback to the course administrators.
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Estimated TOEFL · Writing
Key Takeaway
The email effectively communicates the main points but lacks depth in elaboration and contains several grammatical errors.
Lack of elaboration on technical issuesCritical
“I attended it for a week, although the content was super helpful and understandable but i experineced some technical difficulties during this online course.”
Fix·I attended it for a week. Although the content was super helpful and understandable, I experienced several technical difficulties, such as frequent disconnections and slow loading times, which disrupted the learning process.
Grammatical errorsModerate
“Thankyou so much for your time.”
Fix·Thank you so much for your time.
“My main objective of writing this email to you is to convey these problems to you so that your team can work on it and provide a hassle free online course.”
This statement clearly communicates the purpose of the email, which is crucial for effective communication and aligns with TOEFL criteria for clarity.
“Hope you are doing well.”
Starting with a polite greeting sets a positive tone for the email, which is important for maintaining professionalism and social conventions.
“Thankyou so much for your time.”
Expressing gratitude helps to maintain a courteous tone, which is a key aspect of effective communication and social conventions in TOEFL writing.
Vocabulary & Flow
Incorporate more linking words to improve the flow and coherence of the email, such as 'however', 'furthermore', or 'in addition'.
Grammar Corrections
1 items foundCapitalization and spelling error
Email Structure
The greeting is polite and sets a positive tone for the email.
“Dear Course administration team, Hope you are doing well. I recently attended an online course offered by your team. I attended it for a week, although the content was super helpful and understandable but i experineced some technical difficulties during this online course. These glitches were affecting the course every now and then. I intended to bring it to your notice that these technical glitches were experienced by almost everyone who had attended the course. My main objective of writing this email to you is to convey these problems to you so that your team can work on it and provide a hassle free online course. Thankyou so much for your time. Regards, Sapna Nadeem”
The opening paragraph introduces the context of the email effectively.
The body addresses the main points but lacks detailed suggestions for improvement.
The closing paragraph is polite and includes a call to action by asking the team to address the issues.
The sign-off is appropriate and maintains a professional tone.
“Regards”
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Improvement Roadmap
Provide specific examples of technical issues experienced.
Now: I experienced some technical difficulties during this online course.
Try: I experienced issues such as frequent disconnections and slow loading times during this online course.
Providing specific examples can significantly enhance the clarity and persuasiveness of the email.Correct spelling and capitalization errors.
Where: body
Try: I experienced
Use more varied vocabulary to avoid repetition.
Try: Instead of repeating 'course', use synonyms like 'program' or 'session'.