Write an Email
·You purchased a textbook from the campus bookstore, but your professor changed the required book on the first day of class. The bookstore has a 7-day return policy, and you are on day 6.
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Key Takeaway
The email effectively communicates the request and includes necessary details, but it suffers from grammatical errors and a lack of varied sentence structure.
Grammar and syntaxModerate
“With due respect i wanted to discuss”
Fix·With due respect, I wanted to discuss
Spelling errorMinor
“reciept”
Fix·receipt
“I kindly request you to let me know about the whole return process for this book”
This clearly states the student's intention and request, which is crucial for effective communication.
“I have the original reciept available with me.”
Providing purchase details adds credibility and supports the request for a return, which is important for a logical argument.
“Thankyou so much for your time.”
Maintaining a polite tone helps in establishing a positive relationship with the reader, which is beneficial for achieving the desired outcome.
Vocabulary & Flow
Incorporate more transitional phrases to improve the flow and coherence of the email.
Grammar Corrections
1 items foundPronouns should be capitalized.
Email Structure
The greeting is appropriate and sets a respectful tone.
“Dear Bookstore Owner, Hope you are doing well. With due respect i wanted to discuss that last week i purchased a book from your store to be used in my semester program. But Upon discussion with my professor, he advised me to exchange the book with another course book. I cost of this book is”
The opening provides context but could be more concise.
All requirements are addressed, but the explanation could be more detailed.
The closing is polite and includes a call to action.
The sign-off is appropriate and professional.
“Sincerely”
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Improvement Roadmap
Use more transitional phrases to improve coherence.
Now: Limited use of linking words.
Try: For instance, 'Furthermore, I would appreciate information on the refund timeline.'
Enhances logical flow and coherence.Correct spelling errors.
Where: body
Try: Change 'reciept' to 'receipt'.
Ensure all pronouns are capitalized.
Try: Change 'i' to 'I'.