Write an Email
·You had a job interview last week for a marketing position at a tech company. The interviewer said they would contact you within five business days, but you have not heard back. You want to follow up professionally while expressing your continued interest.
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Key Takeaway
The email effectively conveys gratitude and interest in the position, but it suffers from grammatical errors and awkward phrasing.
Spelling errorsCritical
“responce”
Fix·response
Lack of specificity in inquiryModerate
“I would like to know when should i be expecting a responce from your team.”
Fix·Could you please provide an update on the expected timeline for the hiring decision?
“I am writing to show my gratitude for choosing my name for the interview process at the marketing position at the tech company.”
Expressing gratitude sets a positive tone and demonstrates professionalism, which is important for TOEFL scoring.
“Work with your professional and highly efficient team would be a dream come true.”
Expressing enthusiasm about the opportunity shows genuine interest and engagement, which enhances the persuasiveness of the email.
“Please let me know if any kind of information is needed from my side.”
Offering to provide more information demonstrates readiness and willingness to assist, which is a positive trait in professional communication.
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Grammar Corrections
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Email Structure
The greeting is polite and appropriately addresses the HR team.
“Dear HR team, Hope you are doing well. I am writing to show my gratitude for choosing my name for the interview process at the marketing position at the tech company. I felt honoured to be considered for that role opportunity. The interview process went smoothly and i am still waiting for any responce from your team regarding my interview. I would like to know when should i be expecting a responce from your team. Work with your professional and highly efficient team would be a dream come true. I would kindly like to know the timeline for the hiring process as i want to be ready for the position. Please let me know if any kind of information is needed from my side. Thank you for your time and consideration. I will wait for a positive and prompt response. Sincerely, Sapna Nadeem”
The opening paragraph clearly states the purpose and provides context by expressing gratitude.
All requirements are addressed, but the inquiry could be more specific.
The closing paragraph includes a call to action and expresses gratitude, maintaining a professional tone.
The sign-off is appropriate and includes the sender's name.
“Sincerely”
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Improvement Roadmap
Use more transitional phrases to improve flow.
Now: The email lacks transitional phrases.
Try: In addition, I am eager to contribute to your team.
Using transitional phrases can improve coherence and readability, leading to a higher score.Correct spelling errors.
Where: body
Try: response instead of responce
Ensure proper capitalization throughout the email.
Try: Use 'I' instead of 'i'.