Write an Email
·You borrowed a rare book from your university library for a research project. The book was due last week, but you still need it to complete your paper. You want to explain the situation and request an extension.
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Key Takeaway
The email meets the basic requirements but lacks clarity and depth in elaboration.
Vague explanationCritical
“I was occupied in my brother wedding so I am not done with my research project yet”
Fix·I was busy with my brother's wedding, which delayed my progress on the research project. Therefore, I still need the book to complete my paper.
Grammatical errorsModerate
“Is it possible in your that I can pay for the late submission fees.”
Fix·Is it possible for me to pay the late submission fees?
“I am writing to express my apology for the late return of my history book”
The student begins the email with an apology, which is a polite and appropriate way to address the issue of the late return, fulfilling one of the task requirements.
“therefore, I would like to keep it for two more weeks.”
The student clearly states the desired extension period, which is crucial for the recipient to understand the specific request being made.
“Is it possible in your that I can pay for the late submission fees.”
Offering to pay late fees demonstrates responsibility and willingness to comply with library policies, which can positively influence the recipient's decision.
Vocabulary & Flow
Include more transitional phrases to improve the flow and coherence of the email.
Grammar Corrections
1 items foundPreposition and possessive form correction
Email Structure
The greeting is polite but could be more personalized if the recipient's name is known.
“Dear Staff, I am writing to express my apology for the late return of my history book which I borrowed on May 15. Firstly,I was occupied in my brother wedding so I am not done with my research project yet therefore, I would like to keep it for two more weeks. Is it possible in your that I can pay for the late submission fees. I expect that you grant me a favour in this matter. thanks.”
The opening paragraph clearly states the purpose of the email and provides context for the late return.
All requirements are addressed, but the explanation and request could be more clearly articulated.
The closing expresses a request for a favor and gratitude, but could be more formally structured.
Your email is missing a proper sign-off. End with "Sincerely," "Best regards," or "Thank you," followed by your name.
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Improvement Roadmap
Provide a clearer explanation for the need to extend the book loan.
Now: I was occupied in my brother wedding so I am not done with my research project yet
Try: Due to my brother's wedding, I was unable to complete my research project on time. I still need the book to finish my paper.
Improves clarity and provides a stronger rationale for the extension request.Add a formal sign-off to enhance professionalism.
Where: sign_off
Try: Sincerely, [Your Name]
Use more varied transitional phrases to improve coherence.
Try: Additionally, I would like to request an extension.