Write an Email
·You recently completed an online course offered by your university. While the content was valuable, you experienced several technical difficulties with the learning platform. You want to provide feedback to the course administrators.
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Key Takeaway
The email provides a clear intent and addresses the requirements, but it suffers from vague elaboration and multiple grammatical errors.
Vague description of technical issuesCritical
“I came accross many technicals problems , like the page does not respond to any key functon”
Fix·Provide specific examples of the technical problems, such as 'The page frequently froze when I attempted to submit assignments, requiring a reset.'
Grammatical errors affecting clarityModerate
“it hepled me alot with the increase knowlegde that I am taking from this course.”
Fix·Correct the sentence to 'It helped me a lot with the increased knowledge I gained from this course.'
“Thank you so much for the course online that I completed”
Expressing gratitude sets a positive tone and demonstrates politeness, which is valued in formal communication.
“it hepled me alot with the increase knowlegde that I am taking from this course.”
Acknowledging the value of the course shows appreciation and provides a balanced perspective, which is important for constructive feedback.
“I wanted to leave a feedback for this issue s that the future students when they get enrolled in this course will not have to face the issue that i faced.”
This demonstrates a forward-thinking attitude and concern for others, which adds depth to the feedback.
Vocabulary & Flow
Incorporate more linking words to improve coherence, such as 'however,' 'therefore,' or 'in addition.'
Grammar Corrections
1 items foundCorrect verb tense and spelling errors, and improve sentence structure.
Email Structure
The greeting is present but could be more specific by addressing a particular department or individual.
“Dear University , Thank you so much for the course online that I completed, it hepled me alot with the increase knowlegde that I am taking from this course. I do have some concerns, while I was doing the course , I came accross many technicals problems , like the page does not respond to any key functon and then we have to reset it all the time. As well as the audio clips were lacking some important parts sometimes. I wanted to leave a feedback for this issue s that the future students when they get enrolled in this course will not have to face the issue that i faced. Thank you so much for your time , Regards, Emad”
The opening paragraph effectively sets the context by expressing gratitude and acknowledging the course's value.
The body addresses all requirements but lacks detailed examples and elaboration on technical issues.
The closing expresses gratitude and implies a call to action by suggesting improvements for future students.
The sign-off is appropriate and polite, maintaining a formal tone.
“Regards”
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Improvement Roadmap
Provide specific examples of technical issues to enhance clarity and persuasiveness.
Now: I came accross many technicals problems , like the page does not respond to any key functon
Try: For instance, the page frequently froze when I attempted to submit assignments, requiring a reset.
Providing detailed examples can significantly improve the clarity and effectiveness of the feedback.Correct spelling and grammatical errors to improve readability.
Where: body
Try: Correct 'hepled' to 'helped' and 'knowlegde' to 'knowledge'.
Use more varied transitional phrases to enhance coherence.
Try: In addition to the technical issues, I also found that...