Write an Email
·You are a student in Professor Lisa Chen's Modern European History class at Eastwood University. The final essay for the course was due on November 10, 2023, but due to a family emergency, you were unable to submit it on time. Today is November 13, 2023, and you are writing to apologize for the late submission and to request an extension. This essay constitutes 30% of your final grade, and you are currently holding a B+ in the class.
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Key Takeaway
The email demonstrates a basic understanding of the task with a clear intent and polite tone.
Incorrect Deadline MentionCritical
“As the dead line was on Monady April 24”
Fix·As the deadline was on November 10, 2023
Vague ExplanationModerate
“I was out of town because of my sister's graduation ceremony as it was in another state so I had to make two weeks plan to attend it.”
Fix·I was out of town due to a family emergency involving my sister's graduation ceremony, which required extensive travel and planning.
“I am writing to apologize for not submitting my project”
The student clearly states the purpose of the email by apologizing, which is essential for demonstrating awareness of the situation and respect for the professor.
“I request you to allow me one extra week to upload my assignment.”
The student directly requests an extension, which is crucial for addressing the main requirement of the task.
“I make sure that I submit it till May 1.”
By providing a specific new deadline, the student shows responsibility and planning, which strengthens the request for an extension.
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Grammar Corrections
1 items foundThe correct tense is present perfect to indicate an action not completed by the present.
Email Structure
Your email is missing a proper greeting. Start with "Dear [Name]," or "Hello," to establish a professional tone.
The opening paragraph clearly states the purpose of the email, which is to apologize for the late submission.
The body addresses the main requirements but lacks detailed explanation of the family emergency.
The closing expresses hope for the professor's consideration, which is polite and appropriate.
The sign-off is appropriate and maintains a formal tone.
“Sincerely”
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Improvement Roadmap
Provide a more detailed explanation of the family emergency to enhance clarity and empathy.
Now: I was out of town because of my sister's graduation ceremony as it was in another state so I had to make two weeks plan to attend it.
Try: Due to an unexpected family emergency, I had to travel out of state for my sister's graduation, which required significant time and planning.
Improves elaboration and context, leading to a higher score.Correct the deadline date to match the scenario.
Where: body
Try: As the deadline was on November 10, 2023
Use more varied vocabulary to avoid repetition.
Try: Instead of 'submit', use 'send' or 'deliver'.