Academic Discussion
·Preserving Historical Sites
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Key Takeaway
The response articulates a clear opinion but lacks depth in supporting arguments and specific examples.
Superficial EngagementCritical
“While Student 1 raised some relevant points, I feel that preserving the historical monuments is not the first thing that the government needs to deal with.”
Fix·Include a specific point from Student 1's argument and provide a detailed counter-argument.
Lack of Specific ExamplesModerate
“First and foremost, annual tax revenue is limited, the government should allocate these resources to the most crucial parts, such as improving public transportation or subsidizing families that have financial problems.”
Fix·Provide specific examples of how public transportation improvements or subsidies have benefited communities in the past.
“Therefore, these are the reasons why I think the government should not spend significant resources on preserving historical monuments.”
Clearly states the student's position, which is essential for a coherent argument.
“First and foremost, annual tax revenue is limited, the government should allocate these resources to the most crucial parts, such as improving public transportation or subsidizing families that have financial problems.”
Demonstrates awareness of real-world constraints, adding depth to the argument.
“They can let the business finish this job, and give certificates to those who put effort into these kinds of activities.”
Offers a creative solution, showing the student's ability to think beyond the given problem.
Vocabulary & Flow
Incorporate more varied transitions to enhance flow.
Grammar Corrections
1 items foundWord choice; 'areas' is more appropriate than 'parts' in this context.
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Incorporate specific examples to strengthen arguments.
Now: First and foremost, annual tax revenue is limited, the government should allocate these resources to the most crucial parts, such as improving public transportation or subsidizing families that have financial problems.
Try: For instance, investing in public transportation in City X led to a 20% increase in commuter efficiency.
Adding concrete examples can significantly enhance the persuasiveness of the argument.Use varied vocabulary to avoid repetition.
Where: throughout
Try: Instead of repeating 'government,' use 'administration' or 'authorities.'
Engage more deeply with classmates' arguments.
Try: Directly quote a specific argument from Student 1 and provide a detailed counterpoint.