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Genetic Engineering in Agriculture

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Submitted: Jun 3, 2026, 12:34 PM

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Estimated TOEFL · Writing

14/ 30
Basic
0152230
Rubric2.0/5

Key Takeaway

The response effectively states a position on GMOs and acknowledges opposing views, but it lacks specific examples and deeper engagement with classmates' arguments.

Lack of Specific ExamplesCritical

GMO crops can help increase production and make food supplies more stable.

Fix·Provide specific examples of GMO crops that have successfully increased production, such as Bt cotton or drought-resistant maize.

Vague ElaborationModerate

Therefore, I believe GMO can be beneficial if they are controlled properly.

Fix·Expand on what 'controlled properly' entails, such as specific regulatory measures or testing protocols.

Clear Position

I agree more with Student 1 that GMO s should be more widely used to address global food shortage.

This statement clearly establishes the student's stance on the topic, which is crucial for a coherent argument.

Acknowledgment of Counterargument

Although Student 2 raises a valid concern about possible environment risks, these risks can be reduced through strong regulation and careful testing before GMO crops are used widely.

Acknowledging the opposing viewpoint demonstrates an understanding of the complexity of the issue and adds depth to the argument.

Emphasis on Urgency

Also, food shortages are an urgent problem, so we should use scientific soultions when they are proven to be safe.

Highlighting the urgency of food shortages strengthens the argument for using GMOs as a necessary solution.

Vocabulary & Flow

Linking Wordsgood
althoughalsotherefore

Continue using a variety of linking words to enhance the flow of the argument.

Repetitive Words
GMO4x
genetically modified organismsbiotech crops

Grammar Corrections

1 items found
farmer face serious problemsfarmers face serious problems

subject-verb agreement

Suggested Academic Phrases

biotech cropsrigorous testing protocols

Improvement Roadmap

High Impact

Incorporate specific examples to support claims.

Now: GMO crops can help increase production and make food supplies more stable.

Try: For instance, Bt cotton has significantly increased yields in India.

Providing concrete examples can significantly enhance the argument's persuasiveness.
Quick Wins

Correct grammatical errors for clarity.

Where: body

Try: farmers face serious problems

Polish

Use varied vocabulary to avoid repetition.

Try: Instead of repeating 'GMO', use 'genetically modified organisms' or 'biotech crops'.