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Genetic Engineering in Agriculture

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Submitted: May 29, 2026, 09:53 AM

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Estimated TOEFL · Writing

14/ 30
Basic
0152230
Rubric2.0/5

Key Takeaway

The response clearly states a position against GMOs but lacks sufficient elaboration and specific examples to support the argument.

Lack of Specific EvidenceCritical

GMO play with the hormonal processes and bring long term changes in them.

Fix·Provide specific studies or examples that demonstrate how GMOs affect hormonal processes to strengthen the argument.

Vague ExamplesModerate

Young boys and girls are having precocious puberties.

Fix·Clarify this point by providing statistical data or references to scientific studies that support the claim about precocious puberty.

Clear Position

In conclusion, i will say GMO should not be used at all.

The student clearly states their position against the use of GMOs, which is essential for conveying a clear argument.

Concern for Health

my main concern is still human health.

Highlighting health concerns shows the student is considering the potential negative impacts of GMOs, which adds depth to their argument.

Engagement with Classmate

While i do understand Student's 1 concern but i will disagree with her point of view

Engaging with a classmate's viewpoint demonstrates the student's ability to consider and respond to differing opinions, which is a valuable discussion skill.

Vocabulary & Flow

Linking Wordsgood
WhileFurthermoreAlthoughAdditionallyIn conclusion

Continue using transitional phrases to improve the flow and coherence of arguments.

Repetitive Words
GMO5x
genetically modified organismsmodified cropsbioengineered foods

Grammar Corrections

1 items found
Additinally, we have seen that since GMO articles are getting consumed in a vast scale now, Young boys and girls are having precocious puberties.Additionally, we have seen that since GMO products are being consumed on a vast scale now, young boys and girls are experiencing precocious puberty.

Spelling and grammatical errors corrected for clarity and accuracy.

Suggested Academic Phrases

bioengineered foodsAccording to recent studies

Improvement Roadmap

High Impact

Incorporate specific evidence or studies to support claims.

Now: GMO play with the hormonal processes and bring long term changes in them.

Try: According to a study by XYZ, GMOs have been shown to affect hormonal processes in ABC ways.

Providing specific evidence will significantly strengthen the argument and improve the score.
Quick Wins

Correct spelling and grammatical errors.

Where: throughout

Try: Additinally -> Additionally

Polish

Use varied vocabulary to avoid repetition.

Try: Instead of repeating 'GMO', use synonyms like 'genetically modified organisms' or 'bioengineered foods'.