Write an Email
·You had a job interview last week for a marketing position at a tech company. The interviewer said they would contact you within five business days, but you have not heard back. You want to follow up professionally while expressing your continued interest.
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Key Takeaway
The email effectively communicates the intent to follow up on the job application, but it suffers from grammatical errors and a lack of varied sentence structures.
Grammatical errorsCritical
“If you dont mind may I ask about how much time it takes for commitee to inquire hiring”
Fix·If you don't mind, may I ask how much time it will take for the committee to finalize the hiring decision?
Lack of clarityModerate
“so that I can really be focused on learning your policies.”
Fix·so that I can better prepare myself by learning your company's policies.
“I am writing to express that I am thankful to you and your company to provide me a chance to be interviewed.”
Expressing gratitude sets a positive tone and shows professionalism, which is important for maintaining good relations with potential employers.
“I would like to emphasize again that I am eager to be head of sales deparment in your organization”
Reiterating interest in the position demonstrates enthusiasm and commitment, which are valued traits in a candidate.
“If your Hr team requires any further information, I am available to provide that any time on email and also in person.”
Offering to provide additional information shows willingness to cooperate and ensures the employer has everything needed to make a decision.
Vocabulary & Flow
Incorporate more varied transitional phrases to improve the flow and coherence of the email.
Grammar Corrections
1 items foundspelling error
Email Structure
The greeting is present and appropriate, but specifying the manager's name could personalize the email more.
“Dear Manager, I am writing to express that I am thankful to you and your company to provide me a chance to be interviewed. As a matter of fact I would like to emphasize again that I am eager to be head of sales deparment in your organization as your team is professional and enthusiastic to learn more. If you dont mind may I ask about how much time it takes for commitee to inquire hiring so that I can really be focused on learning your policies. If your Hr team requires any further information, I am available to provide that any time on email and also in person. I would appreciate any assistance you could provide.”
The opening paragraph clearly states gratitude and sets the context for the follow-up.
All requirements are addressed, but the language could be more polished and formal.
The closing paragraph effectively offers further assistance and expresses gratitude.
Your email is missing a proper sign-off. End with "Sincerely," "Best regards," or "Thank you," followed by your name.
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Improvement Roadmap
Use more varied and formal language to enhance professionalism.
Now: If you dont mind may I ask about how much time it takes for commitee to inquire hiring
Try: Could you please inform me about the expected timeline for the hiring decision?
Improves clarity and professionalism, which can significantly impact the score.Correct spelling and grammatical errors.
Where: body
Try: committee instead of commitee
Add a professional sign-off to conclude the email.
Try: Best regards, [Your Name]