Write an Email
·You borrowed a rare book from your university library for a research project. The book was due last week, but you still need it to complete your paper. You want to explain the situation and request an extension.
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Key Takeaway
The email effectively communicates the request and includes all necessary components, but it suffers from grammatical errors and limited vocabulary.
Spelling and grammar errorsModerate
“i had borrowed a special edition coverbook”
Fix·I had borrowed a special edition book
Lack of elaborationModerate
“i still need it for another couple of days.”
Fix·I still need it to complete the final sections of my research paper, which are crucial for my project.
“i want to apologize for not returning the library pocession on time”
The student effectively acknowledges the late return, which demonstrates responsibility and respect for the library's rules, aligning with TOEFL's emphasis on addressing all parts of a prompt.
“I sit possible for me to return it after the 15th of this month?”
The student clearly specifies the desired extension period, which helps in making the request concrete and actionable, a key aspect of effective communication.
“I am ready to pay any extra fine for the extension of my borrowed time period.”
Offering to pay fines shows accountability and a willingness to adhere to library policies, which enhances the persuasiveness of the request.
Vocabulary & Flow
Use more varied linking words to enhance cohesion, such as 'however', 'therefore', or 'since'.
Grammar Corrections
1 items foundCapitalization and word choice
Email Structure
The greeting is polite and sets a respectful tone.
“Dear Librarian, Hope you are doing well. I wanted to bring it into your notice that i had borrowed a special edition coverbook from the library for my research project. It was due last week but unfortunately i was not able to return the book due to my unavalabilty in the town. With due respect, i want to apologize for not returning the library pocession on time as i still need it for another couple of days. I sit possible for me to return it after the 15th of this month”
The opening paragraph introduces the situation clearly, but could benefit from more detail about the importance of the book.
All requirements are addressed, but the explanations lack depth and detail.
The closing expresses gratitude, which is polite, but could be more specific about the next steps.
The sign-off is appropriate and maintains a formal tone.
“Sincerely”
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Improvement Roadmap
Enhance elaboration by providing more context and details.
Now: i still need it for another couple of days.
Try: I still need it to complete the final sections of my research paper, which are crucial for my project.
Providing more context can significantly improve clarity and persuasiveness.Correct capitalization errors.
Where: body
Try: I had borrowed a special edition book
Use more varied linking words to enhance cohesion.
Try: However, therefore, since